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Chỉnh sửa lỗi giùm mình!! thanks a lot
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    Default Ch???nh s???a l???i gi??m m??nh!! thanks a lot

    Vung Tau is one of the major tourist familiar people of the city, Vung Tau is a coastal city beautiful, just Ho Chi Minh City, 125 km, so people want the city to Vung Tau is very easy by motorbike. Vung Tau is a coastal city very cool and close to nature, where there are very beautiful beaches such as beachfront, beach below, park ... .. to the coast full of golden sand, and coconut products has created a very unique scenery and romantic of Vung Tau ,if each of you to wake up early to go to when you coast is very exciting when sound waves so hip with lan fresh air, will give you a feeling that REFRESH, along with the road drinking Cong by sea to create an image so much poetry .Vung Tau is not only a strong coastal city, but here there are monuments, temples and pagodas but the father from the old days to return, such as pagodas: Tu Phuoc Lam, Chua Hai Van, Linh Son from .... . with an architecture unique, ancient and particularly not a place which has been. When tourists to Vung Tau, would not only be traveling around, these attractions, the beautiful beaches but they also used other types of seafood are very fresh life , When the restaurant in the tourist will enjoy the dishes from the very strange kind of seafood such as special prawn, crab fishing ... .... Will create a strange and will make customers happy, as if guests do not want to travel into the restaurant with food and drink at the customs exempted along the beach where the ink baked sweet very natural with the wind blowing long long it will be a very interesting and people will do da tourists and suddenly your favorite.

    Vung Tau though a coastal city beautiful but does not mean that the city does not have any negative points limit the development of the city to go a lot, and I noticed a flaw largest coastal city, which is It is having the problem of refuse, when every opportunity to Tet l??? people and tourists from other provinces and cities here are very crowded and competitive environment here is very polluted,, Coastline each winter when the tourists are very much garbage, creating a coast full of garbage, and is no longer the beautiful coastline again made worse image of a coastal city and many tourists International very afraid to come here.
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    Quote Originally Posted by kelvin1988 View Post
    Vung Tau is one of the major tourist familiar people of the city, Vung Tau is a beautiful coastal city , It is far from Ho Chi Minh City about 125 km, so people want come from the city to Vung Tau is very easy by motorbike. Vung Tau is very cool and close to nature, where there are very beautiful beaches such as beachfront, beach below, park ... .. to the coast has full of golden sand, and coconut products has created a very unique scenery and romantic of Vung Tau ,if each of you to wake up early to go to when you coast, is very exciting when sound waves so hip with lan (Tui ko hiểu đoạn này) fresh air, will give you a feeling that REFRESH, along with the road drinking Cong by sea to create an image so much poetry .Vung Tau is not only a strong coastal city, but here there are monuments, temples and pagodas but the father from the old days to return, such as pagodas: Tu Phuoc Lam, Chua Hai Van, Linh Son from .... . with an architecture unique, ancient and particularly not a place which has been. When tourists come to Vung Tau, would not only be traveling around, these attractions, the beautiful beaches but also they used other types of seafood are very fresh life , When the restaurant in the tourist will enjoy the dishes from the very strange kind of seafood such as special prawn, crab fishing ... .... Will create a strange and will make customers happy, as if guests do not want to travel into the restaurant with food and drink at the customs exempted along the beach where the ink baked sweet very natural with the wind blowing long and long it will be very interesting and people will do da tourists and suddenly your favorite.(Hoàn toàn ko hiểu đoạn này)

    Though Vung Tau is a beautiful coastal city but It's not mean that the city does not have any negative points limit the development of the city to go a lot, and I noticed a flaw largest coastal city, which is having the problem of refuse, when every opportunity to Tet holiday people and tourists from other provinces and cities make Vung Tau is very crowded and competitive environment is very polluted,, Coastline each winter when the tourists are very much garbage, creating a coast full of garbage, and is no longer the beautiful coastline again will make worse image of a coastal city and many tourists International very afraid to come here.
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    Quote Originally Posted by kelvin1988 View Post
    Vung Tau is one of the major tourist familiar people of the city, Vung Tau is a coastal city beautiful, just Ho Chi Minh City, 125 km, so people want the city to Vung Tau is very easy by motorbike.
    Bác rút ngắn các câu lại đi. Đoạn trên có thể chia ra làm 2-3 câu. Dài quá làm người đọc đứt hơi.

    Vung Tau is a beautiful coastal city of VN. It is one of the major tourist attractions in the South. Located 125Km from HCM city, people can easily get there by motorbikes.


    Tớ thay đổi vị trí của câu để đi từ đại cương đến chi tiết làm cho người đọc chú ý và thấy dễ hiểu hơn.

    Nhắc một chữ VT được rồi. Nhắc nhiều quá đâm ra nhàm chán cho người đọc.

    Thử sửa lại hết bài coi.

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