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I have a topic writing an essay: part-time job. this is my introduction. please anyone who can help me check this introduction . is it enough detail background information, the thesis statement is parallel and grammar. Thank your for helping me very much

“Maybe you don't like your job, maybe you didn't get enough sleep, well nobody likes their job, and nobody got enough sleep. Maybe you just had the worst day of your life, but you know, there's no escape, there's no excuse, so just suck up and be nice” said Ani Difranco. This can be true to many students who are studying at college or university. They have to study hard-work every day because they want to have a good future for their lifetime. Moreover, students need to have money to pay tuition fees and living expense. Therefore, many students have part-time jobs to stable life while they study at school. Besides these reasons, students get part-time jobs should have three things benefits such as have extra money to support their life, get work experience and expanded relationship social.( thesis statement)